aspiring sports writer is this a good story about bulls?

[roseay]

guys tell me what yall think do i have good writing ability im tryin to see if im good at this

A bed of thorns in a rose garden

be honest no hard feelings open to all criticism

 

[houheffna]

Lay off the metaphors...way too much.

 

[Crystallas]

Paragraph structure, google it. Good luck, have fun.

 

[roseay]

the box i was typin in was tiny i see several errors but this was the first time ive tried it

 

[roseay]

anybody else

 

[scottiepippen1994]

It was like reading Charles Dickons.
Depressing story, but Good work.

 

[roseay]

thanks how can i get better